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[bob irons]

I was staying in a motel and having a wild affair with the desk clerk. one day after returning to my room and taking a shower. the phone rings it was the desk girl asking what i was doing? i said just got out of shower.she asked if i was wet and naked? i said yes.then she said i'll be right there.before i could get back to the bathroom there was a knock on the door.i looked out the peephole it as her.so i opened the door in the nude.she came in fast and shut the door. want more?

[topdogger]

Originally Posted by bob irons

I was staying in a motel and having a wild affair with the desk clerk. one day after returning to my room and taking a shower. the phone rings it was the desk girl asking what i was doing? i said just got out of shower.she asked if i was wet and naked? i said yes.then she said i'll be right there.before i could get back to the bathroom there was a knock on the door.i looked out the peephole it as her.so i opened the door in the nude.she came in fast and shut the door. want more?

No not really

[topdogger]

I'm not here to judge whether or not the o/p is full of shite (although I suspect you are right). Some of the best "true" stories on here seem fictional, merely because they are so well written and transport the reader to a place where they can imagine the exploits happening in front of them.

That is sadly not the case here. One short paragraph and then the question - "want more?"

Well no actually I don't.

If I'm outta line here then I'm sure I'll be smacked down but hey, if she's such a massive sl*t then slam her against the wall of the Motel and pull her panties to her knees, whip out your mobile and get her to say "cheese"!

Secondly, grab my interest, fill me with details, how did she smell? What colour was her underwear? Did she belch after swallowing?

Just try to stop it from merely being words -after all, this section isn't called "Erotic Single Paragraphs"

[the_jammer]

Ditto

If you're gonna tell a story, tell us the story. If you're just here to garner attention for yourself and see how many people you can gather into your following ... move along.

[jjanda_2000]

Originally Posted by topdogger

. . . after all, this section isn't called "Erotic Single Paragraphs"

- Now that's funny. Should be in the rules.

[topdogger]

Originally Posted by jjanda_2000

- Now that's funny. Should be in the rules.

Ditto

[flintlockmdj]

My first thought after reading your little short paragraph was "Not Really". A paragraph this short must reflect the size of your dick

[majinman]

Originally Posted by flintlockmdj

My first thought after reading your little short paragraph was "Not Really". A paragraph this short must reflect the size of your dick

Witty. No, honest.

We have 4-5 dudes shooting down this story. Do more people need to pile on their disbelief?

[topdogger]

Originally Posted by majinman

Witty. No, honest.

We have 4-5 dudes shooting down this story. Do more people need to pile on their disbelief?

Thought I'd already finished the job.

It wasn't a shooting down from me, just constructive critiscism