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Old 10-16-2014, 06:59 PM
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if thought you did better in terms of punctuation but overall it was not a good story it didn't make sense at points and was too short to be enjoyed your stories are all way's rushed
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Old 10-16-2014, 07:02 PM
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Thanks on the punctuation and what do you mean it didn't make sense at points and it was part 1 it's going to escalate in the future because part 2 is a bra and panties match
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Old 10-16-2014, 08:10 PM
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i am not going to point out every wrong point in the story for you sorry.
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Old 10-16-2014, 09:30 PM
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I thought you were trying to help me not cast me away
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Old 11-24-2014, 02:03 PM
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Due to me finishing this months ago but decided instead of posting round 2 I did other things now I'm telling you I'm going to start writing it today and I will more than likely barring something weird I will post it on thanksgiving along with other things so stay tuned
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Old 12-12-2014, 09:56 AM
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Sry guys due to this forums rules saying we can't post stories that involve words like b*tch and sl*t so I have heard I am sry to say that this story has those so I can't post part 2 but I can tell you who wins.


Courtney - black bra and thong but stripped of thong

Jennifer - pink bra and panties but stripped naked
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Old 12-12-2014, 03:37 PM
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You claim to have gotten better but even your comments don't have punctuation. You need to really understand how to use periods and a comma.
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Old 12-12-2014, 05:42 PM
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You can still write it, just blocks the swearing out, like it did when you said it in your comment there.
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Old 12-12-2014, 06:17 PM
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Dr Villain - ok I will get on it right away then .

Remshot - I have gotten better just didnt feel like putting comments in that its not like it was 5 pages long.
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Default Part 2 ( Finally)

Finally , I have come back to write part 2 so here it goes.

" This is a buck naked match and the only way to win is by stripping your opponent naked. "

So introducing first " Courtney Cox" .

And, she came down to the ring wearing a red top with a black skirt , and she didn't have any shoes on .

Introducing her opponent " Jennifer Aniston"

And , she came down to the ring wearing a short black top , with a pair of long white pants and some black high heels .

They started with a tie-up , and Jennifer grabbed Courtney's hair and tossed her to the ground.

Then, she grabbed her head and slammed it down to the mat repeatedly.

Then , Jennifer said " lets get that top off" and goes for her shirt , but Courtney stops her and rakes her eyes.

Then, rolls her up in a schoolboy pin attempt and , grabs her pants and pulls them down and off to reveal Jennifer Aniston's pink panties.

Jennifer - " b*tch how dare you expose my pink panties like some sl*t. "

Courtney - " because I'm going to make you my b*tch , and I wonder if a sl*t like yourself if wearing a matching bra.

Then, a mad Jennifer speared Courtney and grabbed her skirt , but Courtney kicked her off and pulled her skirt back up before any one saw her panties.

Then, that distraction helped Jennifer as she went for a kick to Courtney's face , but she moved out of the way and speared Jennifer.

Then, Courtney said " lets get these heels off" and she pulled one of the black heels off and went for the other heel , but Jennifer kicked her off and Courtney fell out of the ring.

Then, Jennifer got up and took her other heel off to reveal her bare feet to the crowd.

Then, she went to the ropes and went for a slingshot cross body but, Courtney moved out of the way.

Courtney saw Jennifer trying to get up so she set up a spear and when she turned around Jennifer grabbed her , and threw her into the barricade.

Then, Jennifer got up and said" you are mine now b*tch" and grabs Courtney's black skirt and slowly pulls it down and off her creamy legs to reveal Courtney's jet black thong.

Jennifer saw this laughed and said " I wonder if the b*tch has a matching bra on. "

And , Jennifer picked Courtney up and put her over the barricade with Courtney's ass facing the crowd grabbed her shirt and , pulled it off to reveal Courtney's matching black bra.

Then , Jennifer said " who in the audience would like to spank this sl*t , and the guy in the front row who was beside his wife raised his hand and started spanking Courtney's ass when his wife who we will call Mary says.

Mary - " I will give you 20 bucks if you let me take this sl*t's thong off , and Jennifer happily agreed and Courtney was down to just her black bra.

Courtney realizing her situation punched Jennifer in the crotch area and Jennifer doubled over and , Courtney gave her a DDT.

Jennifer was out so Courtney grabbed her shirt and pulled it off to reveal Jennifer's matching pink bra .

Then , Mary said " let me spank her" and Courtney put Jennifer on the barricade and while Mary was spanking poor Jennifer , Courtney grabbed the 20 bucks.

Then , Courtney told the man to hold her down and gave Mary the 20 bucks and said " pull the b*tch's panties off and you can have the money.

Courtney slowly unhooked Jennifer's bra and pulled it off to reveal her breasts and, Mary grabbed Jennifer's pink panties and pulled them down and off to reveal her naked ass and pussy.

Here is your winner " Courtney Cox" and she said " take that b*tch crowd surfing and , a naked Jennifer Aniston was sent out of the arena where officers were ready to arrest her.

So that was the better buck naked match let me know what you think and, I will see you guys later.
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