Sister vs Sister

[smjimmie1348]

I know that but I had already sent 2 messages and it said I had ti wait 720 minutes and I have punctuation for my stories now just not when I post stuff like this because there's no need for punctuation when I am prob not even writing 2 lines in someone else's story like good job or keep up the good work or that's awesome man thanks

[Gao]

Originally Posted by smjimmie1348

I know that but I had already sent 2 messages and it said I had ti wait 720 minutes and I have punctuation for my stories now just not when I post stuff like this because there's no need for punctuation when I am prob not even writing 2 lines in someone else's story like good job or keep up the good work or that's awesome man thanks

There is ALWAYS time for punctuation.

[smjimmie1348]

That's common sense or you can say grandma let's eat

[MickGesitt]

Originally Posted by Gao

There is ALWAYS time for punctuation.

Thanks for trying Goa. But he can't be bothered. That's what makes it annoying when he spams the board with unpunctuated updates for stories we really don't want to read. It really takes the attention away from all of the great, high-quality stories that are on here.

[smjimmie1348]

Do you really not want to read my stories I am getting better but, like I told him there is no need when I'm saying part 2 is done or good job

[smjimmie1348]

What's a appropriate number of parts for this fued to go toe to toe with the best stories on this forum

[MKDude]

Originally Posted by smjimmie1348

What's a appropriate number of parts for this fued to go toe to toe with the best stories on this forum

It has nothing to do with the amount of parts, it's the quality of the writing. No matter how often you defend yourself (even against a bloody site moderator) you still just plain haven't stopped to look at how to make a story more enjoyable. Adding a paragraph or occasionally using a comma will not make you a good writer, neither will a story that's forty chapters long. You need to dedicate yourself to quality, sincere writing that is easy on the eyes and enjoyable to read.

noone wans to reed a stroy like this even if its abuot bellas or watever.

Sentences like that are why you aren't considered a good writing. You can't just choose a popular topic and suddenly become great because you wrote about it. Your stories are barely readable and the readers with even a basic understanding of grammar and punctuation cry. I'd forgive a typo or two, but it's like you can't even stomach reading your own story to look over and see how the final product turned out.

[MickGesitt]

See? With the way your stories currently are, no one cares how many chapters are in it. Its not just your grammar. Like MKDude said, your stories consistently suffer from a lack of quality.

I'm tired of having the same argument. I'm not here to be your English tutor and I don't want it to seem like I'm ripping on you. I'll just give you these last bits of advice and be on my way.

Instead of writing multiple stories at once focus on writing one quality story at a time. Work on writing an actual storyline that flows. I know that you like to do "requests" but you need to provide a reason that your two divas want to strip each other. Don't just throw a bunch of stripping matches together for no reason.

When you write your characters make sure they actually have a character. Take Dayjib and 1993wwe's work for example. They write what the women are feeling and thinking in the situation. This gives you a better grasp on their character and allows you to focus on the embarrassment of them being stripped.

Work more on your description. You're constantly stressing the color of a girl's underwear when that's really the least important thing about the situation. What matters is the girl wearing the underwear. Describe their body and their reaction. Use your words to paint a picture of what we're supposed to be seeing.

That's my last bit of advice for you. Do what you want with it. I'm done.

[smjimmie1348]

This story I will give them a reason to strip each other .

[DoctorOhno]

I would leave your stories inside a Word Document. Just start punctuating comments and writing as if this was being turned into somebody. Then, we can all re-evaluate your work. Seeing comments like "I will beat ur ass" is not something I expect to see in the future despite the hilarity behind it.

Let's end the comments here on a happy note: