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Originally Posted by cerindclvr
Plausibility doesnt have TOO much a place in this kind of fiction. that said, I don't think it was badly written. sure, I almost feel frustrated for Keilani, but as far as description, setup, plot, etc... its all fine and good as far as it relates to setting up the AR scenario. She always screws herself over by acting like a child right when she could've saved herself.
I'm a fan of all things Todd Cheese, although personally I prefer his work with higher, how shall we say... ENF content. The Keilani story is surprisingly light on the stripping and public nudity, etc. That'd be my only real knock on it. Absolutely great stuff otherwise.
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It's not a matter of "plausibility doesn't have too much of a place in this kind of fiction", it's a matter of "it would've been easy to fix". It's lazy writing. For example: in the Erica stories the girl keeps getting naked in weird ways, sure. But the reason why she doesn't just go "hey... uh... can someone give me some clothes, this is kind of stupid" is because she is turned on by being seen and doesn't want to admit it, even to herself. That is a plausible reason for a girl to accept being mistaken for a 12 year old. Not "oh, she's pulling my arm I guess I have to go along with it".
Main problem: this is not how humans act and react therefore I can't relate or understand the plot. If it was just a porno then I'd be fine with it but a story I need to be able to get immersed with. :P