Plausibility doesnt have TOO much a place in this kind of fiction. that said, I don't think it was badly written. sure, I almost feel frustrated for Keilani, but as far as description, setup, plot, etc... its all fine and good as far as it relates to setting up the AR scenario. She always screws herself over by acting like a child right when she could've saved herself.
I'm a fan of all things Todd Cheese, although personally I prefer his work with higher, how shall we say... ENF content. The Keilani story is surprisingly light on the stripping and public nudity, etc. That'd be my only real knock on it. Absolutely great stuff otherwise.
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