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Old 11-28-2013, 06:06 PM
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i like it looking forward to more
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Old 11-29-2013, 01:36 AM
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If you're looking for suggestions...

I think it would be cool if the characters had a few british-isms in their speech. Or you know how Rose always says her th's like f's... stuff like "I like my chips better with ketchup in. What do you fink?"

Don't distract from what you're doing though, because I love it. Just an idea.
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Old 11-29-2013, 06:26 AM
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I love your idea of incorporating British, unfortuantely I don't know anything about British manerism and speech. I'll try my best. All goes according to plan I should have new chapters out by tomorrow night.
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Old 11-29-2013, 08:12 AM
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agree with the above post about the british mannerisims us limeys dont get enough recongition from the yanks
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Old 11-30-2013, 06:11 AM
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Round 9
Martha was starting to feel pretty good about her chances. But she knew it was dangerous to get over confident; that's part of how Rose went from first to last. She was dealt nothing, so she discarded everything but her ace. Unfortunately, she still only had an ace high. Lucky for Martha, Doctor had nothing too and only a Jack high. Nervously, he stood up and took off his shirt revealing his toned chest that can only come from centuries of battles and adventures. "Its about time someone else showed some skin. I been sitting here in my knickers freezing my bums off for the past few rounds." Said rose teasingly.

Round 10
The Doctor was now back at bottom only wearing two clothes, same as Rose. But he knew that he still had a chance. He just had to start a lucky streak like he did earlier. And it looked like faith decided to be kind to him as he was dealt two pair right off the bet. He didn't get anything useful replacing his last card, but it didn't matter. He was confident two pairs would be good enough to at least guarantee that he wouldn't end up in last place. And the Doctor was right. The honor of last place went to Martha. Martha displayed a shock on her face when she realized Doctor's two pairs and Rose's three of a kind beat he pair of aces. She had gotten so far in the game without losing anything that would reveal too much, but her luck finally seemed to have run out. Trying not to look at the Doctor, Martha stood up and took off her shirt revealing a very thin black bra. Rose and the Doctor were both surprised that she, who always dressed so conservatively, would be wearing an undergarment like that. "Jeez Doctor, how long are you going to keep on staring at my chest. Your acting like you never seen one before." Said Martha, trying to put on a braver face then she actually felt. The Doctor muttered sorry and turned his heads away, his face turning red.

Round 11.
Things were looking up for Rose. She was now only 1 win away from first place. However, she couldn't afford to take any chances. Although she hated to cheat, with only 2 losses away from being not only completely naked, but a slave to either Martha or Doctor for the rest of the night (and frankly she didn't know which would be worse) she decided to cement her win for the round. While the other two were checking out their cards for the round, She discretely took out a pair of aces she was hiding in her bra and replaced it two of her cards, which, with her ace of spade that was already in her hand, gave her a three of a kind. Martha ended up in last place with a pair of twos. Not pleased at the outcome, but at least little less embarrassed since she already had to show something, she stood up and took off her pants revealing a matching black thong and a great behind.

Round 12
Martha knew that she had to be very careful now. There stood only 2 bad hands between her and complete humiliation. She was given 4 diamonds. If this had been one of the earlier games, she would have taken her chances and gone for a flush. But with so much at risk, she decided it would be safer to go for a pair and discarded everything but her Queen of Diamond. It appeared though, that she would have been better of taking a risk as her draw yielded nothing of use.

Rose, while she was feeling pretty confident now that the playing field was even, decided to give herself just a little bit of an insurance. Luckily, she had a 8 and a 5 in her hand; conveniently 8 and 5 were the cards that she had tucked into her bra earlier. She reached in when she thought neither of them were looking and slowly, and discretely, begin to take them out when, "Rose!" yelled the Doctor "Blimy! I am astounded! I mean really, resorting to cheating and keeping cards in your knickers?" "Uhm, this isn't what it, I mean, I don't, um" Rose was trying desperately to try and come up with some sort of excuse but she was caught red handed. "I think its only fair that she be disqualified from this game". Doctor agreed "Its only fair Rose, you shouldn't have tried to cheat your way into a win". Rose knew that both of them had a point. She slowly stood up and not daring to look at either of them directly and with a face as red as can be, she removed her bra revealing a perky set of breasts. Then she stuck her finger into her waistband, and trying hard to preserve her last few seconds of dignity, removed her knickers. Rose instinctively tried to cover herself with her hands only to have it be pointed out by both the Doctor and Martha that it was agreed that no covering was allowed. Martha and Doctor then ordered her to stand next to them so that they can enjoy a nice view while they finish the game. Now they were down to two, both wearing only two articles of clothing.
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Old 11-30-2013, 10:27 PM
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not enough description in the tits and pussy for my liking i was exxpecting you to really describe from your description of the bra and knickers but it kind of felt a bit flat
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