[ENF] George's Watch

[booboobooboo]

Here is my first attempt at a story so I would love any feedback or story suggestions. I imagine this as the first in a series. Thanks for reading.

George's Watch
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George was an average college guy. He had average looks, average height, and an average face. He was, for all intents and purposes, a regular guy. There was one thing that made him different, however. His late grandfather was a genius inventor, and when he died he left George his greatest, most secret invention. It was a watch that could stop time. With this powerful device at his disposable, he could take whatever he wanted. He could do anything he wanted. He never needed to pay for anything. If he wanted something, it would magically disappear off of store shelves. The most powerful use of his watch was, of course, the ability to affect people.

The first time he used his watch was the best day of George's life. At first he thought it was just a normal digital watch. But one day while he was sitting on a bench between classes he decided to try to program it. It seemed like a normal watch, until he got to the red button. As he pressed it, the world was eerily silent. He looked around and saw that the halls were still crowded as usual, but that nobody was moving. Everybody was frozen in their place. George had a funny thought and decided to push the red button again. As he did the world came alive again. He quickly pressed it again and immediately understood what he was in possession of. George now had the power to fulfill all of his wildest high school fantasies. He decided to explore a little.

As he walked down the hall he noticed all the hot girls that he saw every day but never thought he had a chance with. He decided to try out his powers. He saw a pretty, thin blonde girl standing still looking at her phone. She wore a white tank top and short denim shorts. She had a perfect tan, C-cup breasts, and well-toned calves. George had seen her in the halls before but didn't have any classes with her. He figured she would be a perfect first experiment. He approached her and admired her strong legs and toned shoulders. He was getting excited at the thought of what was to come, but he wanted to take it slow as this was his first time. He touched her lips with his finger and realized that this was for real. He began to slowly caress her sides and then moved down to her shorts. He undid her shorts and allowed them to drop to the floor.

He stifled a laugh at the sight of this clueless beautiful woman standing in the middle of a crowded hallway with her shorts at her ankles and her camo panties exposed to the world. He sat back down on his bench and pressed his watch again. As the world came alive, the blonde was still deeply distracted by her phone. It didn't take long for the people around her to take notice. The hall seemed to get quiet, and a few girls gasped. Then a guy yelled, "Nice panties!" That's when everybody started laughing and the blonde looked up to discover that everybody was looking at her. She looked down and screamed as the embarrassment hit her. Her camo panties, one of her favorite pairs was on show for at least thirty strangers. She dropped her phone in her hurry to crouch and pull up her shorts. It landed on the ground and smashed into pieces.

As the panicked blonde reached for her shorts, George stopped time again. He walked over to the blonde and gently lifted her legs one at a time, removing her shorts. He emptied the pockets and discovered a $20 bill and a school ID. Her name was Lindsay Cook. He began to form new ideas as he threw her shorts in the nearest garbage can and sat back down on the bench and restarted time. Lindsay screamed even louder at the disappearance of her shorts. She had no choice but to pull her tank top over her panties, and it wasn't long enough to cover it completely. The roaring laughter of the crowd got louder at this new development, and people were taking out their phones. Lindsay looked around, wide-eyed.

"Don't look at me! Who the fuck took my shorts?! Please don't!"

Lindsay began to cry as she saw all of the cameras filming her embarrassment and taking pictures. Suddenly she didn't feel any fabric in her hands and when she looked down she saw that her shirt was gone! Her matching camo bra was the only thing keeping her breasts from bouncing around in public. What the hell is happening, she thought.

"Check out that ass!" " Nah dude, look at those titties!"

Lindsay completely broke down as she stood in the hall in her underwear, surrounded by laughing classmates and complete strangers. Tears were running down her face as she frantically attempted to cover her body. It was at that moment that her camo underwear disappeared. Upon feeling flesh wear fabric was a moment before, fresh fear hit her like a cold shock. She began sobbing more than ever, "Don't look at me! Please, God, no make it stop! Ahhhhhh!" She screamed louder than ever as her hands were tied behind her back and her name was written in big black letters on her chest. Here she was in the middle of the hallway with her big tits flopping around for all to see and there was no doubt of who she was. These pictures and videos would follow her around for life.

At that point she couldn't take it anymore and as she tried to cower and cover up, she wet herself. Pee splashed off the floor and onto her legs as the crowd laughed harder. She got up to try to run but the crowd was too big. They weren't necessarily trying to keep her there, there were just too many people in the hall now, all laughing at this miserable naked and exposed woman. So she ran, trying to break through the crowd, but only managing to give them a great view of her flopping, tan breasts. It all proved to much for her, and she finally fainted, falling to the ground with her breasts on show and legs spread out, so everyone had a great view of her hairless pussy.

George decided that was a pretty good experiment for his first day.

[jimmythehand]

Hi boo. This is a well written story with excellent description, which is always a plus for me. While the timestop genre has been fairly well covered over the years it's always interesting to see someone else's perspective on it, as there are almost always some new ideas that come in and expand the timestop concept.

Since you stated an intent to make this a series, I do feel that in your effort to get all your thoughts out there on the page you have rushed the story a bit - it would have made a more enjoyable and tantalising reading experience (imo) if you'd perhaps stopped at removing the shorts in this first part, which would have left you more scope to increase your victims' exposure in each chapter, with more and more clothing being removed. Having gone all the way in the first chapter you'll either need to come up with some new and interesting scenarios for the denuding to take place in or else progressively increase the sexual content, which will move it further away from the original ENF concept; you may already have a plan on this.

For myself, I prefer to feel that any person in a story that's receiving the kind of life changing trauma and humiliation that Lindsay is be thoroughly deserving of it - having perhaps been an antagonist earlier in the plot - but that is personal preference on my part and shouldn't stop you writing what you want to write.

Once again I enjoyed the story on the whole and look forward to seeing what you do with any continuation. If this is your first story then I'm sure you'll develop into a truly excellent writer as you continue on and I look forward to reading anything else you put up in the future!

[booboobooboo]

Thanks for the feedback. I appreciate it. I kind of rushed at the end because writing it was getting my horny lol. And when I say series I mean that George will be in many different situations with different people, not just a series concerning this one girl. I'm glad you liked it.

[smjimmie1348]

This is a great story thank u for taking the time out of your busy schedule to post this awesome story to read

[jimmythehand]

Originally Posted by booboobooboo

Thanks for the feedback. I appreciate it. I kind of rushed at the end because writing it was getting my horny lol. And when I say series I mean that George will be in many different situations with different people, not just a series concerning this one girl. I'm glad you liked it.

You're welcome. Getting horny is pretty much why we're all here (both in terms of being on this site specifically and in how we came to be conceived) so I don't think anyone can blame you for that. I knew what you meant by series; I just thought you might have some trouble coming up with a way to make each chapter unique, having gone straight to full nudity on the first girl in the first chapter - I'm sure you've got it all worked out though (or will have once you've written it)! Good luck with the next chapter; I hope we won't have too long to wait!

[FLP00]

Agree with what has been said already; the story is good and has a lot of potential, but you rushed the end. The pee part is not my thing either, but to each his own.

A little advice; try writing when you're not horny. It's easier to develop the story that way.

[booboobooboo]

That's my secret. I'm always horny. lol

And maybe you're right about the pee thing. Just thought to go for max humiliation. I'll take these tips into my next one.

[crapycrapycrap2]

I like how you went into super-humiliation mode. I have a feeling that a lot of stories lately are too light in that sense. Totally fine with pee if it adds to the humiliation. I like your style, keep it up!