Thread: [Fictional Stories - ENF] Will’s Mom Comes Undone
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Old 10-09-2017, 03:50 PM
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"At 4'9", Tracy wasn't a midget"

4'10" is the cutoff, so...yeah. That line should have been changed when the height changed. I know it's nitpicking, but for some reason that error has been bugging me since I read the story hours ago.

Other than that, a good conversion, though you write very good stories without any help.
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