ENF?
Hey I have some really difficult time reading this , and I will tell you why so hopefully you can try your best to make it better these are just suggestions , but it's your story anyways here are my complaints/suggestions
1) too much ENF
I don't mind ENF in general , but sometimes it's not right all the time like say you had one scenario w/ the main character or a side character stripped naked in one chapter that's fine , but you have it in all chapters .
2) pokemon
Pokemon also known as pocket monsters are your friends so you can catch more and train them to be their very best , and obtain a special bond so they were not supposed to be clawing or biting or whatever clothing off the other trainer .
3) battle style
Battle style is ok , but you rush into the ENF too quickly if you want people to read your story then slow it down , and have the trainer try to take off the opponents clothing until they are in their underwear not only to take away most of the ENF as I said earlier , but it will also stay in touch w/ pokemon .
4) underwear
Underwear also known as undergarments are supposed to be hidden from others so when they are exposed they are humiliated , so what better way to more humiliate them is to wear embarassing underwear ( ex like you did animal print , but it was so rushed like I said earlier that it just turned me and probably everyone else from this story . )
But , like I said this is your story so these are my ideas and suggestions to try and help you plz don't be mad
PS : you never said anything to me about me continuingly writing a new series now that I have gotten better so if you want to see me write something else just say something .
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