Thread: [Fictional Stories - ENF] Lexi and the Festival
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Old 07-26-2015, 03:01 PM
eldain eldain is offline
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Great story, man. I like the plot and your sense for a detail.

Anyway, if I could give you a feedback I guess that there is one thing that could make your stories even better. The climax of your story is very brief. I (and possibly other readers) will appreciate if you are more descriptive and devote more paragraphs to troubles of the main character struggling with her unlucky fate.

This is just a remark of an amateur. Your story is great. Keep writing!
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