Thread: [Fictional Stories - ENF] Will’s Mom Comes Undone
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Old 06-02-2015, 03:34 PM
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amfanon -

First, apologies for the delayed response and thanks so much for your kind words. Second, I completely hear you in terms of trying to prolong the actual stripping sequences. "And They're Off" didn't come as easily as many of the other installments and my biggest disappointment in writing it was that Danielle's "unveiling" happened in an instant. I attempted to compensate for that by keeping her unaware of her circumstances for a bit but even to me that's not quite as satisfying as, say, the sequence in "Pride Goeth." I'll see what I can do going forward to have the pay-off better reflect the build-up (thanks again by the way - deity isn't a compliment one hears every day).

As for Nicole, she is definitely due for some comeuppance. I had drinks recently with the woman on whom she is based (a friend and former colleague) and she is both more arrogant and more attractive than ever. It definitely gave me some food for thought so stay tuned for some more tension between her and Mrs. Parnell.
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