Nice work just maybe the only thing I see wrong with this is maybe the story part should be in smaller paragraphs and not just a huge one apart from that really enjoyed it. As for revenge I wouldn't mind this continuing its nice to see the images to the stories as well and maybe for the next one make it a little longer with a few more images if you have more time for that I understand working on a story can be hard but it will pay off in the long run to make a larger story. Maybe also make your own thread here for the new story just cause some people might not have gotten to see this as it is in a Arianna Grande request for fictional story thread just a few thoughts but yeah I would love to see this continue thought it was a really nice story.
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