Thread: [Fictional Stories - ENF] Paranormal ENFestigators
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Old 01-06-2015, 06:55 AM
HoracetheSlug HoracetheSlug is offline
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You describe the action well, but, as the good doctor said, other descriptions are lacking. You need more aesthetic detail and dialogue to complement it.
A lot of potential here, I look forward to more.
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