Suggestions
See? With the way your stories currently are, no one cares how many chapters are in it. Its not just your grammar. Like MKDude said, your stories consistently suffer from a lack of quality.
I'm tired of having the same argument. I'm not here to be your English tutor and I don't want it to seem like I'm ripping on you. I'll just give you these last bits of advice and be on my way.
Instead of writing multiple stories at once focus on writing one quality story at a time. Work on writing an actual storyline that flows. I know that you like to do "requests" but you need to provide a reason that your two divas want to strip each other. Don't just throw a bunch of stripping matches together for no reason.
When you write your characters make sure they actually have a character. Take Dayjib and 1993wwe's work for example. They write what the women are feeling and thinking in the situation. This gives you a better grasp on their character and allows you to focus on the embarrassment of them being stripped.
Work more on your description. You're constantly stressing the color of a girl's underwear when that's really the least important thing about the situation. What matters is the girl wearing the underwear. Describe their body and their reaction. Use your words to paint a picture of what we're supposed to be seeing.
That's my last bit of advice for you. Do what you want with it. I'm done.
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