I agree with Dr. Villain, you two are almost certainly the same person. Also, I hate to be rude, but this was terrible.One paragraph, zero build up, hopelessly difficult to read, not a good story at all. I could honestly write a criticism longer than the story itself, and that's without going into the idea that you just tried to give yourself tips while still not being able to write.
There are a number of fantastic, well written WWE Diva ENF stories on here. Read them, memorize why they're good, think about what's a good formula and what would be unique and creative. And please, get a spell check. Re-read your own story and ask yourself if you think this is worth posting.
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