[MickGesitt]

Great to see that you put more description into this chapter and paid a lot more attention to Paige's EUF moment. Paige's pale bra-clad chest is definitely something worth paying attention to.

I also really liked the match itself. It showed that even though Paige is a very talented wrestler, Nattie's a byproduct of THE Dungeon and is on a completely different technical level so my Pale Princess had to change her game around to defeat a better opponent. Layla may have "experience" but her best days were when she was Michelle McCool's bratty sidekick. She's no Natalya so I'm expecting Paige to have a strong showing at TLC.

I love the way that the 'Wardrobe Malfunction' rule was put into place because of Paige and its main purpose was to prevent her from using wardrobe malfunctions to win matches but it didn't even take her for a full month to bend the rule to her favor by creating her own wardrobe malfunction and using it to her advantage to win a match and keep her title.

Also, the style that you write your matches in has grown on me. In the first chapter, it seemed a little silly to have the counts breaking up the action. But now I find that they really help. Your styles takes a long series of paragraphs that can sometimes be a daunting read and breaks them up so the reader doesn't get overwhelmed and can easily follow what's going on in the match.

I noticed that in this chapter you started color-coding the dialogue. Interesting choice. If each character speaks in a specific color it certainly makes it easier for the reader to follow who is saying what. I think its a good idea but I'm afraid I have to nitpick. Paige's ring gear is purple and I think that her signature color should be purple as well. Natalya and the Hart family have been rocking pink for generations. Rosedust should probably be gold or yellow as long as its not too hard on the eyes. The other divas don't really matter. But I feel like some of them already have a signature color that you should stick with from a purely aesthetic standpoint.

I'd also like to state how glad I am to see high quality wrestling stories like this and DoctorRipper's 'A Tale of Two Adversaries' on this site. I had a crappy day at work today, so it was really nice to have a quality story waiting for me when I got home. Thank you for all the time and effort that you put into entertaining us with your writing. Keep up the great work. I'm really enjoying watching as you come into your own and improve as a writer.