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Originally Posted by smjimmie1348
Hey I agree that was awesome and I loved how u gave Naomi a chance to win the divas title unlike some promotion we know and love
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Naomi's had plenty of chances to win the title.
TLC 2012 vs Eve Torres.
Night of Champions 2013 vs AJ Lee vs Brie Bella vs Natalya.
Naomi's orbital bone injury prevented her Elimination Chamber 2014 championship match vs AJ Lee.
WrestleMania XXX vs AJ Lee and everyone else.
Money in the Bank 2014 vs Paige.
Plenty of chances, the issue is that the promotion we know and love isn't comfortable with her as an actual champion yet. The real thing to take away here is that the EUF moment focused on Naomi's great ass.
And to address 1993wwe, great story so far. I'm loving that my pale princess Paige is getting some more attention on this board. One thing I really like about this story specifically is that you show the PG WWE reacting to the PG-13 moment.
Also, I'm fine with you skipping through the lead up to the big PPV matches since you're summarizing everything. But when you get to the big matches at the PPV make sure to play up the EUF/ENF moments.
Like Dayjib said after the first chapter, you could use some more description in those moments. In this chapter, you paid more attention to the moment itself and that Naomi had been stripped to her thong. But I think you really failed to describe anything. You had Naomi's big ass out there in almost all its glory but you never really mentioned what it actually looked like. I know there are always pictures online to help with that but this is a written story things so should have a proper written description. You should especially consider this when Paige gets to the point where she's removing the other divas' underwear for full on ENF moments.
Out of curiosity, what does Rosedust look like? Gold and black with a rose design like Cody's star one? Or is she a more 'rose-like' color and is pink and black instead of gold?