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Originally Posted by divalover95
i could get down with a sequel my only critique is i think you could add more detail into her aka size or breasts nipples pussy hair shaved etc.... but i understand some people prefer it to be vauge and im cool with that i personally just feel the more description the more i connect and am attracted. But its a fantastic story none the less.
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Easily the weakest part of my writing is the physical description. I tend to write about the parts that I care about, without thinking of an audience. My goal was to kind of let people use their imagination and just insert their ideal type into the character(s) that they wanted. I do this mostly because it is awkward describing breast size, because I don't care that much. I do care about the lower half, but not necessarily how much hair is present or not present. For a lot of readers I understand this is essential, so instead of describing it and messing up the description, I try to leave it up to the imagination to a certain point.
I also try and help the reader imagine the characters by working in trope, giving vague details. Penny is a grown up blonde queen bee/mean girl bully type as has been shown in countless TV shows and movies, therefore I hope working with a trope can help kind of mold the character and make up for my weakness as a writer.
The Megan character was suppose to act as a voice of reason, a character that was relatable and who did not get involved herself with the erotic elements of the story(except unintentionally). Megan is suppose to point out some of the most rediculous aspects of the ENF genre of writing. She is confused as to why the co-workers are so sadistic, why Mrs. Smith is acting so ridiculous. To me the main charcter/object of the story is Penny, so her physical description is the only character I really give any thought to at all and even that is scant.
Obviously I have a lot of improving to do and I try and experiment with each piece and get better each time. I'll probably go more into the physical details of the characters when I make a sequel, and give the town a name and so on.