Thread: [Fictional Stories - ENF] GRETCHEN'S WORLD
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Old 12-19-2013, 11:19 AM
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Excellent job Splotch. I like how the tension is slowly built up. Makes the big expose all the more satisfying.

The only issue I have with the character is that she in an actor. I have this bias in my head that a lot of Hollywood is plastic anyway so I expect even B actresses to have nasty boob jobs...

Nonetheless, great job.

I will try and add a chapter to the Vanessa story...
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