Thread: [Fictional Stories - Lesbians] Lesbian Shop Manager Forced To Give Up Alarm Codes
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Old 12-13-2013, 03:40 AM
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I like the idea, but the writing could use some work. Just a bit of constructive criticism, can't wait to read what you write next!
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