great work! i was getting worried near the end that that'll be the last of it, but i was relieved to know Zeke kept his job. does this really mean you'll be making this a series?
if you're planning on writing more, i'd suggest that maybe you should try putting a bit more detail into things though to make it even more vivid, maybe describe the girls more, like how they look exactly in their outfits and states of undress, and maybe their figures and body types too.
again, great work! i especially liked the part with Katie Allman.
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