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Originally Posted by dsp333
VERY good read, incredible attention to detail and how things unfolded, quite a lot better than I was expecting. You're obviously very talented.
Only thing I feel I have to critique here is the ending felt like a bit of a let down in comparison to everything before it. I assume you were probably pretty tired of typing by the time you got to the panties and all, but man, there was just such fantastic build up...
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Thanks for the kind comments.
Yes, I was kind of bored when I got down to the final part. I find the best parts always come before the end, so it tends to decline in the last few paragraphs. I'm weird like that. The build is more exciting than the climax to me.