This is an excellent thing you've done here. You were thoroughly descriptive, the characters are lovely and well detailed, and it's extremely creative! I absolutely cannot wait to see more -- I like that you're building something, and I certainly think it has the potential to out do mine..!
some other more specific things I like:
Love the main character
you've expertly captured the feel of the story quite nicely
just the proper amount of naughtiness
gives the instant gratification (the early stripping in this chapter was very satisfying, haha), the 'chapter end' satisfaction of Glorinda's stripping, and builds the long term anticipation of seeing the main character nakies
foreshadowing of future opponents (a 'long term villain')
lovely, sexy details
keep being awesome!
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