Suggestions
This has become one of my favorite ENF stories of all time. Chapter 2 in particular was the epitome of what an ENF story should be. The enmity born of socio-economic differences, the tantalizing stripping sequences (like Felicia's crotch seam being split by the sword), the haughty girl earning and getting her comeuppance, and the deep humiliation of being sodomized with her own prized possession in front of a crowd. Brilliant! The other part that really stood out was Felicia's spanking by her mother in front of all the household servants (and what happened after). What abject humiliation! (Can you guess who my favorite character is?)
Suggestions: Please have more girls get anally penetrated with various objects, hopefully ones that have some meaning or significance in the story (and in front of lots of spectators of course). More spanking would be great too, especially if there is an existing relationship between the spanker and the spankee or some hatred/rivalry between them (for this reason the spanking in Chapter 1 was not as intense as the other two). Since the story involves arena fights and magic (and I get the feeling you've watched some anime), how about making the girls fight some monsters? They could be anime-style tentacle demons or, if you don't want to go that far, monsters from Western mythology that just strip the girls and molest them a bit.
I'm really hoping that you will like and use some of these suggestions, but in the end it is of course your story. Just don't stop writing it before that evil queen gets (what I'm sure will be) her mind-blowing comeuppance!
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