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As always, your stuff is excellent Splotch. This was a great chapter -- a very uncomfortable scene at the dinner table. I've always been a fan of "I know i'm far too close to naked for comfort, but have to play it cool" kinds of scenes. Thin pajama pants are one of my favorites, and of course the seat of them ripping at the end was a well described inevitable conclusion...
side question: are the chapters you're posting here a sort of second draft? i.e. have you changed anything since you posted them on other sites?
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