Rayna's big day
 

This is a one part story for me to get back in the writing groove I hope you will enjoy it.

Rayna was a 18 yr old girl with brown hair , a sexy ass , and she was from Ashington.

But, this was the day of her graduation and nothing was going to stop it she said.

Graduation Day - 9:00

Rayna woke up from bed after her mom yelled for her to get up and come eat breakfast so she won't starve on her big day.

Rayna got up and walked down the stairs and saw her mom and dad eating breakfast in the kitchen.

Rayna walked into the kitchen and said " hey mom hey dad I'm so excited today I'm going to graduate. "

Rayna's mom - " yes honey I know your excited but eat and go change clothes because the ceremony starts at 12. "

Rayna's dad - " do what your mom said and plz hurry we don't want to be late to see you graduate now do we. "

Rayna - " yes ma'am no sir" .

She grabs the piece of bacon from her plate and eats it.

Then , she grabs her egg sandwich and starts to eat it.

And, after about 5 minutes of eating and talking rayna was ready to shower and get changed for her graduation .

Rayna walks back upstairs and goes into the bathroom.

She takes off her pajama pants to reveal her panties.

She then slides her panties down her long legs to reveal her naked ass and pussy.

Then, she grabs her shirt and pulls it up and off to reveal her bra.

She then unhooks her bra and lets it fall to the bathroom floor exposing her perky breasts.

And, she turns the water on in the shower then steps in.

While she's in the shower she starts rinsing her long brown hair by letting the water run over it.

Then, she grabs the shampoo squeezes some out and runs her hands through her long brown hair.

She stood scrubbing her hair and puts her head back under the shower head to rinse all the shampoo out of her hair.

Then, she reaches for the soap but since her hands were wet it slipped and when she bent down to pick it up her brother walked in and saw her naked ass glistening with the water all over it.

Rayna saw him screamed and said " get out or I will kill you" .

Rayna's brother then ran out of the bathroom and closed the door behind him.

She is so embarassed that she closes the shower curtain to cover herself from future embarassment .

She then grabs a dish cloth and runs it under the water to get it wet.

Then, she grabs the soap and starts to soap her naked body from head to toe.

She looks in the mirror and starts to admire her body so she steps closer to the water to rinse all the soap off from her naked body.

She slides the shower curtain back over so she can step out of the shower.

She is out of the shower and picks up the towel that she got out of the dryer.

She dries herself with the towel.

She then grabs the hair dryer and dries her hair.

She wraps the towel around her naked body opens the bathroom door and walks out.

She's now in the hallway and she walks past her brother's room and she wanted to get back at him for barging in and seeing her naked body.

But, she thought let me get clothes on first.

So she walks down the hallway and gets to her room.

She opens the door walks in and then closes the door.

Rayna is in her room and she opens her drawer out and picks up the bra that she wants to wear for graduation.

Rayna drops the towel onto the floor exposing her naked body once again but only to hook her bra up to cover up her perky breasts.

Then, rayna looks in her panty drawer to find the matching pair of panties to match her bra , but couldn't find it so she decided to not match her bra and panties.

Then , she goes in the closet and pulls the gown that she is going to wear for her graduation off the hanger.

She then slips the gown over her head to cover up her unmentionables.

She heard a knock and she said " come in" .

Rayna's mom - " oh honey you look beautiful now hurry up and put your heels on and meet us in the car.

Rayna - " yes mom"

Rayna's mom then leaves her daughter's room and closes the door behind her.

Rayna - " ok where are those heels. "

Rayna sees a pair of black high heels beside her bed.

Rayna opens her door walks out and closes the door behind her.

Rayna walks down the stairs in a blue and white gown signifying the school's colors.

Rayna opens the door and walks out of it and closes it.

Rayna heads to the car to go to her graduation.

Rayna gets in the car and they drive off.

They arrive at the stadium and rayna gets out of the car and her mom and dad say " go we will meet you back here when it's over , but we will be in the stands watching our baby graduate.

Rayna - " ok"

Rayna walks off to go where she needs to be.

Graduation Day - 12:00 at Ashington Stadium.

The ceremony is about to begin so plz take your seats and when I call your row plz come forward says the principal.

After about a hour and a half they finally get to the r's of the alphabet.

The principal then acknowledged that by waving Rayna's row to come on up and receive your diploma.

Rayna - " omg I'm so happy ain't you Rhonda ".

Rhonda - " I will be in just a few seconds. "

They start walking on the stage and Rhonda steps on Rayna's gown making it rip off exposing Rayna's pink lacy bra and naked ass and pussy without any panties on .

Rayna - " eep" tries to cover up and asks Rhonda " why you do that. "

Rhonda - " it was a accident" .

Rayna then jumps on Rhonda to take her gown off to protect her own modesty.

But, Rhonda overpowered her and puts rayna over her knee and starts spanking her.

Rayna's crying and begging for help , but everyone is too shocked to move.

Rhonda - " I'm going to keep spanking you miss goody two shoes. "

Rayna - " plz someone help me" .

The principal was the first to snap out of it and goes over there and begs for Rhonda to let rayna go.

After 10 more humiliating spanks on Rayna's naked ass Rhonda let her go and before rayna tried to run Rhonda grabbed her pink lacy bra and ripped it off exposing her perky breasts to the crowd.

Rayna runs off the stage towards the bathroom not caring about her diploma , her friends and family just to try and protect her naked body from more humiliation .

Well that's it I hope you liked it plz comment on what you think see you later.

Nice try jimmie

Better attempt that your previous stories can see some improvement here. Good effort.

Better attempt that your previous stories can see some improvement here. Good effort.

Thanks
 

Thank you all for the great comments and yes I was gone so I could practice but now I'm back baby this was just 1 in the many good stories I plan to post on this great forum .

I can appreciate the story. Entering was pretty good, but Rayna's humiliation, the core of the story, was rushed.

It's a great premise and I wish there was something more to it. If you could flesh it out, may be first with the short scene with her brother, then the humiliation on stage, I'd really love to read it.

Thanks
 

Hey thanks glad you like it I thought I did well with the humiliation but I guess I will just do better next time and what do you mean flesh it out.

I agree maybe you should re do it and make it longer by flesh it out he means more detail making it longer what's she feeling what are people in the crowd doing.

Humiliation
 

I thought I did by having the crowd stunned and her running to the bathroom naked to protect her modesty.

Yeah but it wasn't long enough it was too rushed for anyone to enjoy it. You need to give people a chance to get into it and a chance to connect to the characters you don't enjoy a film when you don't like any characters. This follows the same principle allow yourself to build the characters up so when the stripping happens we actually care another thing about characters you give no clue as to why Rhonda steps on her dress you could explain there backstory.

Humiliation
 

Ok I agree but there is no backstory I just included her to have her step on her dress and humiliate rayna that is all.

Yeah but you have to understand people don't just step on another girls dress. Even if it was just she was jealous of her or something at least the reader gets a sense of why things in the stories are happening.

Humiliation
 

Oh I get it thanks however I'm sry to say this but I won't be rewriting this story if I do I will probably do more wrong than good so I will move on to other stuff that you all would like for me to do?

And yes, it was a good point, but by flesh out, I mean add more detail. We've got the most basic structure of what you want to happen, but our jobs as writers are to paint a picture that is clear and vivid.

A little half-assed example could be: "She looked down, seeing her naked lower half. She had instantly regretted shaving, as she had not even the cover which her natural state could afford to her if she had not butchered it. She was left dazed, her dress carelessly around her ankles and her 'friend' not seeming to budge.

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With no option, having already been humiliated not once, but twice by her attempt at stealing her friend's dress, she looked like a deer in head lights. On all sides there were people, all curious at the fledgling adult baring herself, albeit unintentionally, and she did the only think that came naturally. She ran.

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Her heart was heaving from the adrenaline of the short sprint added to her humiliation. People ran after her as she ran even! Were they that rabid in the sight of flesh? Rayna had not thought they were protecting her, as she was in fight or flight mode, and anything was an enemy to her lowered status. She closed her eyes, letting her naked breasts heave again her chest. A slight drip of perspiration began to flow along her athletic build forming a stream that flew down the steep valley between her chest and would be joined by other droplets.

She was alone in the bathroom, a mutter of a tone she couldn't comprehend indicated that a small crowd, obviously aids to her humiliation, had formed and had no intention of leaving until they were resolved. She had worked more than a decade and right on the cusp of her graduation from school likely stood her greatest challenge; what could she do though? She was naked, a light shudder reminded her, alone in a dimly lit bathroom that had obviously seen the bare minimum of cleansing, and a crowd ready to swallow her up the second she stepped out.

Maybe if she waited here long enough, someone would bring her clothes?"

As it's your story, you've likely got the inspiration I simply didn't have when writing this poor work above. In the excerpt I threw together, far from perfect, I tossed in some of her thoughts, some descriptions of scenery, and some cause and effect. You've obviously a knack and if you can visualize your next story, describe every murky detail in your lust filled fantasy, I'm sure you'll write great things for our community.

But remember, don't even bother if it's not fun. I have to continually go on writing hiatuses due to my stories seeming more a chore than a escape for me, and frankly it's stressful. Read everyone's comments with a grain of salt, my own included, and write what you like. You'll be much happier for it.

Story?
 

Thanks to all of you who read and commented on this story it means a lot to me so if you want I could do something else so just message me or comment on here and I see what I can do!