yeah but you need full stops dude. I mean come on you commented saying how you use punctuation and didn't put a full stop in it. What MickGessit said is true why should we care if you do not care enough yourself?

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Hey is there a nice part in your body man I've seen things wrong in everybody's story's on here but instead of being mean and hurting them so bad they don't want to continue writing but I say good story keep up the good work why can't u do the same as soon as this story is finished u will get what u want me quitting as a writer on this forum

"You'll get no sympathy from me."

-IkeGesitt

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I'm not asking for your sypamthy

do I have one nice bone in my body no not really. Sorry I won't baby you, I give my honest opinion if you can't handle it then don't ask people for it. It is as simple as that really.

Smjimmie, I see the work you're trying to put into this and that's awesome. But the one thing you shouldn't be doing is arguing with two readers who really want to help you. Mick has gone out of his way to punctuate some of your chapters; if you follow what he did in his examples, we would not have any issues. Don't take this the wrong way, I like your passion for this but it's not quite at the level of publishing.

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Hey doctorohno you are right I will look over his punctuation on the chapters he has rewritten and I'm sorry Mick I hope you can forgive me and I will try my best to make these last few parts of this story awesome and thank you doctor for those kind words

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Here's a update for all of you wondering out there

Birth of a crazy chick part 4- typed and reviewed halfway written

Birth of a crazy chick part 5 - about to start typing later today

Kelly kelly vs Brie Bella ( strip till naked) - typed and reviewed and hopefully I can write it later today and post it tonight as well if not hopefully this weekend

Hey Jimmie I have an idea for your next story a wwe diva past vs present bra and panties wedgie on a pole match after diva gets stripped they get hung by there pantie or thong till they rip Idea for the divas past trish torrie candice lita Stacy Gail Kim and Ashley present the Bella twins rosa natlya Beth Phoenix Kelly Kelly summer Rae aj and Paige

Two more past divas to make 9v9 Michelle mccool Christy hemme or Melina