New interactive ENF Story

[Derelict]

Do your best! That's all anyone can ask!

[SPLOTCH11]

jm6379, your chapters are great! Like the pacing you got going on, hard to do in a ENF story, let alone a interactive one. keep it up, drag it out as long as you want

[jm6379]

Thanks for the compliments Splotch.

I've got a couple of ideas to keep May's secret going for another few chapters but I was hoping someone can take up one of the other girls first so I can also write towards that to try and keep the whole story congruent. Otherwise May's chapters are going to look like something on it's own, unrelated to the rest of the story.

Basically going forward I was going to build up May's paranoia and ego to the point where everyone on the camp will revel in her humiliation later.

I'd like to use one of your other characters if possible to aid towards that end.

Hi Splotch,

I was hoping someone could take up one of the other girls so I can also write towards that end. Otherwise May's chapters would seem to be on their own and not congruent with the rest of the story.

Going forward I was going to build up May's paranoia and ego to the point everyone will revel in her ultimate humiliation.

[Derelict]

Now, some people might disagree with me, but I don't think you should worry much about the other paths. Each path is an "alternate dimension", so each girl will have her own "reality". You could add the other girls in and make them act however you want, I'd think.

[jm6379]

OK, I've used the other girls in very minor supporting roles.

Was just wondering if I could use one of them in a pivotal way to strip May in the end.

I've added two versions of a new chapter. On one, May goes crazy and is determined to use her powers to find out who entered her cabin. He ego grows bigger and makes lots of enemies until she is finally taken down.

In the other, she is slowly becoming a nervous wreck (paranoid).

Feedback appreciated.

[SPLOTCH11]

both story lines are great. I wrote a Diane chapter, she coud be used.

[jm6379]

Hi guys,

I'm having a hard time thinking of how to finish off the May nervous wreck chapter. For some reason it's easier to take down ego b*tches than nervous wrecks.

Appreciate any ideas.

Also like the Dianne and Melony chapters. May wait awhile and see how those stories unfold.

[Derelict]

Yes, it is a challenge...

Maybe, in her anxious state, she could start making some very questionable decisions or oversights? She could trust her secret with the wrong person and find herself blackmailed by them. She might mess up her bra stuffing and raise a few eyebrows.

Originally Posted by jm6379

Hi guys,

I'm having a hard time thinking of how to finish off the May nervous wreck chapter. For some reason it's easier to take down ego b*tches than nervous wrecks.

Appreciate any ideas.

Also like the Dianne and Melony chapters. May wait awhile and see how those stories unfold.

[jm6379]

I was thinking about it in my travels today. I thought out two ways besides yours actually:

1.) She is stripped through a series of accidents or 'unfortunate events'. This is the easier way.

2.) She is reduced to such a state where something triggers her to come clean. The others don't actually know, but in her mind she thinks they are blackmailing her. This is my preferred "psychological thriller" finish but I don't have the skill to write it.

[jm6379]

Almost got the ego b*tch finale ready. About 5 1/2 pages long in Word. May want to hold it a bit and do tweaks as the other story lines develop?