[ENF] Need Feedback Please

[talis5]

Thanks for reading.

I am currently working on a sort of ENF interactive story that is quite abstract and perhaps borders a little on the absurd and fantastic. It is written in the same style and setting as the old "Dragon's Lair" arcade game. In it, Dirk is kidnapped by an evil sorceress who transforms the forest where he and Daphne live, into a wicked woods complete with monsters and her nefarious tower at the center. She plans to cast a spell to turn Dirk into her greatest minion yet and take over the world!

Daphne is hit by a spell that is supposed to turn her into a beast like a horse or a pig but Dirk's love overcomes the witches mind powers momentarily and he interferes with the spell to save his new wife. But the half completed spell turns Daphne into a half human half incomplete creature and makes her unable to pursue her love as the sorceress steals Dirk away to her tower. (Picture her as a centaur. Completely normal girl down to her waist but her lower body expands backwards behind her. She retains her human skin all over, she has four incomplete stumpy legs that barely hold up her new bulky body, and her lower torso still ends in a plump female butt.)

Desperate and destitute, Daphne's sobs are overheard by her fairy godmother who uses her magic to reach into the future and use a concept of an "automobile" to magically grant Daphne mobility and capability! Daphne gains 4 magic hubs attached to her 4 stumpy legs that hold large rubbery tires. Her lower torso and rear end echo with the sounds of a car engine that she learns to "start" and use to power her rear legs/wheels to move her around and her front legs/wheels to steer.

Realizing the spell left her new large bottom completely exposed, the godmother creates a silken magical covering that wraps around her stumps and her lower torso to keep her modesty hidden. With her new coverings and new tires, Daphne sets off into the dark woods to find her loving husband and break the witches spell!

The fetishes that may or may not occur in this story as it develops are: Damsel in Distress, ENF, Stuck, Stuckage, Flat Tire, Cranking, Vore, Struggling. I will be writing the story for my own sake and am not looking for folks to add to it but on the off chance that someone out there may even remotely like the same kind of things that I do, to enjoy and give feedback as I bring this odd and "out there" fetish combination to life!

So if you are interested in reading this "choose your own adventure" type story, please let me know and I will post it. Thank you for your time!

[talis5]

So the amount of subsequent choices on writing.com will not allow me to post the number of choices as each short chapter of the story progresses. So I will attempt to post the opening of the interactive story here. I'll wait until I get at least 5 replies to see which way Daphne will go in each event and which choice she makes that will lead her to her ultimate victory in the rescue of her new husband Dirk or terrible fate at the hands of the witches minions or the monsters of the Dark Woods! If you want to go backwards a step, put in another virtual quarter and try again, just reply to let me know. There isn't any real logic to some of the choices similar to the reflex actions of the original game. I hope this works out and folks enjoy it for whatever it ends up being.

[talis5]

Dirk has taken Daphne to a scenic picnic area in a secluded forest. While they prepare to kiss, an evil sorceress appears. Dirk draws his sword and flies to action but the sorceress enchants him leaving him a helpless slave to her whim. The sorceress declares she will cast a spell that will seal Dirk to her will forever and there is nothing Daphne can do about it.

But as the sorceress begins to cast the spell, Daphne throws the picnic basket at her and knocks her magic wand from her hand. The sorceress screams in anger as the wand flies form her hand in mid-spell, turning the pretty forest into a dark and thorny nightmare.

As blasts of magic continue to bounce around enchanting everything with the Sorceress’ evil taint, the sorceress opens a portal to escape. She curses Daphne for her interference with a final spell. She declares Daphne will spent the rest of her days as the pig she really is and promises to complete her spell to bind Dirk at her tower deep within the forest.

The magic hits Daphne and she begins to change! Her clothes rip and tear as her behind begins to grow and extend behind her. Her legs begin to shorten as they prepare to change into the hind legs of a pig, and two small limbs poke out of her stomach as her lower half takes the shape of the beast. She cries out to Dirk, who’s love for Daphne, causes him to snap out of the enchantement but for a moment. He yanks the sorceresses’ tiara down over her eyes causing yet another spell to misfire.

The Sorceress grabs Dirk and forces him to look into her eyes. Once again his gaze becomes vacant as his will is dominated.

When she turns back to Daphne she gasps in surprise. The spell only half finished, Daphne’s body is now spell warped. Her upper body down to her tummy is untouched and covered by the remains of her torn outfit.

Her lower body has been completely altered. While she retains the skin of a human, her behind is large and wide and sticks out behind her in the shape of a beast-like torso only the incomplete spell left her with four tiny stumps of what might have been legs that she can barely touch the ground with.

The sorceress laughs at Daphne’s predicament as the wand explodes in a final spray of magic. Daphne tries to move her now bulky lower body towards the portal but can barely limp along on her magically mutated four stumpy legs. The sorceress bids her good bye forever and jumps through the portal.


Devastated by her predicament, Daphne begins to sob in despair. Her crying attracts a fairy godmother spirit who decides to help with her problem. Daphne begs the Fairy to undo the spell but her fairy godmother explains that she cannot undo what is done. Only the kiss of true love has the power to undo any spell! Daphne sobs, wondering how she can ever get to Dirk and share true love’s kiss ever again. The fairy godmother thinks hard.

Suddenly an idea comes to her. She declares that she cannot change anything about Daphne’s lower half but instead can add an enchantment to it. She waves her wand and four small hubs baring large fat tires magically appear on Daphne’s four stumpy legs and begin to inflate with air. Daphne looks at her fairy godmother in confusion. The godmother explains that she gave her the attributes of an “Auto mobile” a horseless carriage concept from the distant future. She urges Daphne to try it out.


Daphne looks at her helplessly not knowing what to do. Her godmother explains that it is all in her magically simulated engine and she will have to “Start” it up by concentrating. Daphne concentrates and suddenly her rear end begins to shake around and the echo of a car starting is heard! Daphne smiles in success! She asks the godmother how it’s happening and the godmother replies it is simply magic. When Daphne looks back at her body to marvel at the magic, she suddenly snaps her face forward and blushes deeply. Her extended lower half ends in large bare bum cheeks quivering between her rear tire-baring leg-stumps.

The Godmother chuckles at her forgetfulness and waves her wand. A flap of magical cloth appears draping down over her behind and attached to silk braids that encircle her bulky torso just in front of the rear tires and the stumps of her rear legs as well.

Daphne is elated and begins testing out her new wheels by driving around the clearing. She tears up the grass and pulls donuts while the Fairy tries to explain the dangers of the sorceress’ powers.

The Fairy earns Daphne’s attention with a yell and Daphne skids to a halt just before rolling into a bank of thorns. One of the thorns barely pricks her front left tire. As she rolls backward off of the thorn the tire it begins to deflate. Daphne turns around to look at her fairy godmother pouting like a little girl who’s done something bad as the tire slowly flattens out to the ground.

The Fariy “Tsks* at the flat tire before magically replacing it with a new one. She warns Daphne to pay attention or something bad will surely happen to her before she can find her true love at the tower.

The Fairy warns that Daphne will need to watch out for pit falls and traps in the woods and the tower. It is very easy to become mired in muddy ground and she will need all her tires inflated to get out if she becomes stuck. Every flat tire will make getting out of treacherous ground take longer and give the sorceress minions time to strike. If her front tires go flat it will slow her down and make it hard to guide herself. Two flat rear tires and she won’t be going anywhere. The Fairy promises to leave as many tires at certain places as possible to make sure Daphne can replace any flat tires she has.

Just then, Daphne’s rear end begins to chug, rumble and shake, the echo-y sound of a distant car engine gasping for fuel. Daphne is horribly embarrassed but it is over after a moment. The Fairy chides her for using up all of her “fuel” in senseless fun. The fairy godmother beckons Daphne to follow. Daphne tries to follow but her wheels ignore her efforts. She declares happily that she remembers what to do and closes her eyes and concentrates hard! To her dismay, the sound of car trying to start is the only response she gets followed by silence. Each time she tries, her bottom wiggles and jiggles and emits the same sad cranking sound. Confused and embarrassed, Daphne looks to the Fairy.

The Fairy warns her about the importance of staying fed. She promises to place food around the forest and the tower to ensure Daphne does not run out of fuel. If she does: game over. With that, she waves her wand and creates a feast for Daphne who begins to stuff her face. She thanks the Fairy with a mouth full of tasty cheese.

The Fairy’s final warning is to mind the thorns, they will surely flatten her tires. The carrion vines will use their tendrils to sap her fuel and then will eat her if she becomes stranded. She should watch for bogs or chemical traps. Flat tires or not, Daphne will become helplessly stuck in a bog or blow all of her tires in a chemical trap.

Daphne thanks the Fairy again, starts herself and drives off into the forest.